Hansen: Ankeny couple don't know YouTube, but they're on it
The author of this article is Marc Hansen, so I don't see the need to put this name in the headline. If it's his article, then he must be saying it. Plus, it's not an editorial, and the headline itself is not opinion, but fact. Why not just say "Ankeny couple don't know YouTube, but they're on it"? But even that is not the best; it's a cluttered, awkward title. It's a very sweet story about an older couple that sang at a Nursing Home. The video got put on YouTube, and now they're stars, even though they don't own a computer. The headline should match the tone of the story.
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A guy from L.A. who told them he represents "Good Morning America" wants to fly them into New York to chat with Diane Sawyer.
A guy from L.A.? Who are you talking to, your best friend? Put a little work into it. What is the guy's name? What is his title? If these things aren't known, at least use the word "man." "Guy" makes the author sound like he's 14.
I'm all up in your blog.
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