Only regret: Flames didn't 'win'
"That's also not to mention the talent this farm team feeds to a Calgary Flames team that is 40-22-6 and is the third-best time in the Western Conference, and is in Stanley Cup talks this season."
Other than the clearly misplaced comma after "Conference," this sentence is poorly written, with two many verbs. It should read "a Calgary Flames team that is 40-22-6, the third-best team in the conference, and in the Stanley Cup talks..."
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